Thank you to Kaitlyn Sanchez and Ciara O’Neal for this fun Spring Fling contest!
I made my own gif from an Unsplash photo by Jack Murrey
OPENING DAY—POSTPONED (92 words)
By Amy Leskowski
Big game today!
Can’t wait to play!
Drip,
drip.
No way—
a rain delay.
How long?
Yet?
When?
Another ten?
It’s time!
But then—
they wait,
AGAIN.
A wind too loud
and darkened cloud
concern the crowd
of fans so proud.
Each parent waits.
Each coach debates.
Ump estimates,
talks “makeup dates.”
Cleats kerplunk.
Laces dunk.
The field has sunk.
Gear
fills
each
trunk.
It’s time to scoot.
Each star recruit
must take their route
for home’s commute.
Three days of doubt,
slump,
grumble,
pout—
till sluggers shout:
“The sun’s back out!”
Your story reads so naturally, I love your rhyme and all that you capture in so few words!
Thank you!! I’m glad you enjoyed it and appreciate the encouragement!
This is clever and creative. Landed on the right day. Good luck!
Thank you!! I appreciate it! Good luck to you too!
I could feel the disappointment of a rained-out game. Good job getting in feeling and sound with so few words. Good luck!
Yay! I’m so glad! Thank you! Good luck to you too!
You captured the team’s disappointment perfectly, Amy! I love the stair step formatting. Well done!
Thank you, Jill! I’m glad you enjoyed it. Good luck to you!
This is very clever!
Thank you!!
Beautiful. Love the rhythm, the flow.
Thank you!!
Love this! It is absolutely delightful to read aloud. Great job, Amy!
Awww that’s great to hear! Thank you!
I love the wonderful rhythm and how you captured the ups and downs of travel baseball in spring. Great story, Amy!
Awww thank you!!
Fun rhymes, it bounces right along!
Thank you!
Well done, Amy! Excellent rhyme, and with so few words you created a vivid story.
Thanks, Becky! I appreciate it 🙂
I remember these days with our boys – for us it was travel soccer. I learned right away to carry extra large trash bags in the car for all their wet, muddy cleats and uniforms.
I love the rhyme!
Good call! So much mud!! And thank you!!
Amy, I love the rhyme! (I’ve been to many “rain-outs”..brought back memories!!! ) 🙂
Thank you, Susan!! 🙂
Ha, love it, very well done rhyme and the gif really matches the tone, thanks so much for sharing with us!
Thanks, Kaitlyn!! 🙂 I appreciate it!
I love your story so much! I was totally hooked!
Thank you, Sofia! 🙂 So encouraging!
Hi Amy,
This is such a lovely story! I’m a huge baseball fan, so it especially resonates with me. Congrats, and good luck!
Thanks, Connie! I’m so glad to hear it!! I’m a huge baseball fan too! Hope you’re doing well! Thanks for stopping by and for your encouragement!
Great job capturing the progression…and in rhyme to boot! Good luck!
Thank you!!!
Awww! Poor fellas, very few kids won’t be able to identify with this story!
Thank you!! I have too-vivid memories of this happening growing up. Even now, whenever the kids’ games are canceled, I feel that pain with them!
Love the mood of this piece! And so kid relatable!
Thank you!!
What a great story, Amy! You really caught the feeling of a rained-out game. So fun!
Donna O’Donnell Figurski
donnafigurski.com
Thank you, Donna!